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今天周五啦！AmyLee非常感谢大家的陪伴，我们YY可可备考小组的成员越来越多了，不许偷懒，托福优秀范文一天写一篇学一篇哦，写好了可以发送至我邮箱keke3096@qq.com进行互批，共同进步!^^
我已经托福三战过了，对考试各方面都很熟悉，所以大家到考前了有什么疑惑也可以发邮件给我，我会尽力为大家解答。
每天的写作任务是这样的，写好每天的作文发至我的邮箱（如果你想加入作文批改小组请注明），我们将进入互批作文模式。
在此我对每天的topic进行解析和范文精讲，请大家写完作文之后不忘进行比较，找出自己的不足之处。开始吧！
6. If you could change one important thing aboutyour hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples tosupport your answer.
参考分析： 改变其环境，因为一个好的环境会使人们
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| 6、一个重要的改变就是改变环境，让它变的更好 （1）环境好能改善人的身体健康，很多人因为环境而生病 （2）环境好了，吸引更多的游客来旅游 （3）环境好能够促进经济发展，吸引更多的商人来投资 （3）建造工厂，赢利后，就可以向当地政府贡献税收，政府可以利用这些钱改善社区的服务 |
Topic 6 Change about my hometown
If I could change one important thing about my hometown,it would be air pollution problem, and I will give the following reasons to explain why I want to solve the problem.（虚拟语气，上来就直接用假设，假设的好处是为了提出一个新的观点，不过似乎有模板的感觉，开头有点少，可以再叙述一下change的原因，现状，所以我们需要change）
The first and most important reason is thatI hope that my hometown can become a beautiful city. As an old industrial city,my hometown has made a great deal of contribution（做出巨大贡献）for the country’s economic development. At a result（结果是）, the natural environment of the city has been badly damaged. The forest has disappeared; the mountains havebecome bald, and the most awful thing is that the air quality becomes more andmore worsen. People seldom see the blue sky during most time of year.
Another reason why I want to change my hometown’s air pollution situation is that the city’s development needs cleanand tidy environment to attract investors.（投资者）Nowadays people have come to know that the city’s environment,which is so called “software facility of the city”,（环境是城市的软设施）plays an important rolein the city’s future. For example, due to the fact that the environment of thecity is very poor, many local students who pursue（追赶）their study out of the city would rather find the mselves a job inother cities than coming back to their hometown after they graduated.（城市环境不好，年轻人出去学习就不愿意回来了，就像我们出国留学，外面都是好风光，回来看到乌云笼罩的城市也会觉得很不舒服一样的，这个理由很实际。）
In addition, nowadays people have paid moreand more attention to their health. If the air pollution problem cannot besolved as quickly as possible, people’s requirement for a healthy body willnever be realized.
In my mind, changing air pollution will apparently bemy first choice if I can change one important thing about my hometown.Fortunately people in my hometown are gradually aware of the serious problem and start doing something about it.（这篇文章是一篇比较标准格式化的作文，没有太多形式多样的变化，但是格式段落清晰，相信也给考官留下了较好的印象。对于写作水平不是很高的同学，这就是你们的学习目标，不需要有太华丽的语言，先保证把话说明白，句子不出错误，这样好歹拿到一个fair，然后再渲染文字，用好的巨型夺考官的眼球，加油！）
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