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Did you do it? Here's our model sentence: Our model overview is two sentences.
你完成了吗？这是我们的例句：我们的范例概述是两句话。
An overview should be one or two sentences long.
概述长度应该为一两句话。
If your overview is longer, it's probable that you're either including too much detail,
如果概述比较长，很可能你包含了太多的细节，
or separating ideas which should be combined into one sentence.
或者将本应组合成一个句子的观点分开了。
Don't mention any specific numbers or statistics in the overview.
不要在概述中提到任何具体的数字或数据。
Include big-picture details only.
只包含大图片的细节即可。
Here, you can see two ideas.
这里，你可以看到两个表达。
One was comparing the two charts, and highlighting that the trends are different in each one.
一个是比较这两个图表，并强调每个图表中的趋势是不同的。
The second idea highlights the most popular living arrangement in each group.
第二个表达突出了每组图表中最受欢迎的生活方式。
Like many things here, there isn't just one way to write an overview.
像刚才的许多表达一样，写概述的方式不止一种。
However, someone who reads your overview should have a general idea of what the charts will show.
不过，阅读你的概述的人会对图表显示的内容有一个大致的了解。
Now, let's see some skills you need to write the rest of your answer.
现在，我们来看看完成剩下的作答你还需要哪些技巧。
After your overview, you'll write one or more paragraphs, explaining the contents of the charts in more detail.
概述完成之后，你需要写一个或多个段落，更详细地阐述图表的内容。
In this and the next three sections, you'll see some common problems which IELTS students have, and how you can avoid them.
在这个部分和接下来的三个部分中，你将会看到雅思学生所面临的一些常见问题，以及如何避免这些问题。
First, it's easy for IELTS task one answers to become repetitive.
首先，雅思第一题的答案很容易出现重复。
Look at a sentence: Looks fine, right? Let's add another one.
看这个句子：看起来没问题，对吧？再看一个。
Hmm… Not sure this is going well.
嗯……我不确定这个有没有问题。
Let's add one more.
我们再看一个吧。
Do you see the problem? If you write like this, your writing becomes repetitive, and starts to feel like a list.
看到这个问题了吗？如果你像这样写，你的写作就会变得重复，感觉像是一个列表。
Even if you change some words, like using ‘approximately' instead of ‘about',
即使你改变了一些单词，比如用“nearly（接近）”而不是“about（大约）”，
or ‘proportion' instead of ‘percentage', it won't solve the problem.
或者用“proportion(比例)”而不是“percent(百分比)”，其实没什么差别。
So, what should you do? There's more than one idea here, but first, you need to try to use varied sentence structures.
那么，你应该怎么做呢？这里不止一个观点，但首先，你需要尝试使用不同的句子结构。
Look at the first sentence you saw before.
在回顾下看到的第一句话。
Here's a challenge: how many ways can you think of to say the same idea, without changing the meaning, or losing any detail?
给大家一个挑战：你能想出多少种方法来表达同一个想法，而不改变意思，或遗漏任何细节？
Pause the video, and try to write this idea in at least three different ways.
请暂停视频，试着用至少三种不同的方式写下这个观点。
Do it now! Could you do it? Here are some possibilities.
现在开始吧！你能完成吗？这里有一些可能出现的表达。
‘Around 20% of 25-34-year-olds lived alone.' ‘Among 25-34-year-olds, around 20% of people lived alone.'
在25岁至34岁的人群中，约有20%的人独居。在25岁至34岁的人群中，约有20%的人独居。
‘In the 25-34 age group, about 20% opted to live alone.'
在25-34岁的人群中，约有20%的人选择独自生活。
‘Approximately one fifth of those aged 25-34 lived by themselves.'
“在25-34岁的人群中，大约有五分之一的人是独居的。”
What about your ideas? Were they similar to these, or different? So, what's going on here?
说说你的想法？它们是相似的，还是不同的？那么，你能分析一下这些表达吗？
First, you can simply change the order of the ideas, as in sentence one.
首先，你可以简单地改变观点的顺序，例如第一句话中的表达。
You can use an adverbial, like ‘among 25-34-year-olds' in sentence two.
你可以在第二个句子中使用状语，例如“在25-34岁之间”。
You can use different words to refer to the same thing.
你可以用不同的词来指代同一件事。
For example, instead of '25-34-year-olds', sentence three refers to ‘the 25-34 age group'.
例如，第三个句子指的不是“25-34岁的人”，而是“25-34岁的年龄范围”。
Instead of ‘around 20 percent', sentence four refers to ‘approximately one fifth'.
第四句的意思不是“大约20%”，而是“大约五分之一”。
Sentences three and four also change the words ‘lived alone',
第三和第四句也改变了单词“独自生活”，
either by adding an idea – ‘opted to live alone' in sentence three – or by paraphrasing – ‘lived by themselves' in sentence four.
或者增加一个观点，例如第三句中的“选择独自生活”——或者第四句中的改述——“独自生活”。
Be careful with this, because when you change the words, it's easy to change the meaning.
这一点要注意，因为当你换单词时，很容易改变它的意思。
Make sure that your words have the same meaning as whatever you're referring to.
一定要确保你所说的话和你所指代的意思是一致的。
Learning to vary your sentence structure is vital if you want to get higher scores for C&C and grammar.
如果想在语法和写作中获得高分，那么学会改变句子结构是非常重要的。
However, there are other key skills you need.
不过，你还需要其他的关键技能。
Let's look at another! Look at two sentences.
我们看看另一中情况！请看下面两个句子。
These sentences are fine, but if you write your whole answer like this, it will probably get overlong and repetitive.
虽然这些句子没问题，但是如果你像这样写答案，可能会变得太累赘和重复。
Also, to get higher grammar scores, you need to use a range of complex sentence structures.
还有，为了获得更高的语法分数，你需要使用一系列复杂的句子结构。
So, you should try to combine ideas where you can.
所以，应该尽量把观点结合起来。
For example: You can also combine contrasting ideas, using conjunctions like ‘while', ‘whereas', ‘although' and so on.
例如：你也可以结合对比的观点，使用连接词，如“while”，“whereas”，“although”等等。
Here's a task for you.
给大家布置一项任务。
Look at the two charts, and find two contrasting data points.
看看这两个图表，找出两个对比鲜明的数据点。
Write one sentence describing them both, linking the two ideas with a conjunction.
用一个句子描述这两个词，用连词把两个词连接起来。
Pause the video and try it now! Did you do it? Let's look at one example:
暂停视频，现在试试！你完成了吗？让我们看一个范例：
‘Among 35-44-year-olds, almost half lived with their partner or spouse,
在35岁至44岁的人群中，近一半的人与伴侣或配偶住在一起，
while a much smaller proportion lived with their parents (around 10-15%).' Of course, there are many possibilities here.
而与父母同住的比例则要小得多(约为10-15%)。当然，这里有很多可能出现的情况。
But, you should be thinking about this all the way through your answer.
但是，你应该在作答的过程中一直思考这个问题。
Look through the model answer.
看一下解答范例。
Try to find where we've combined two or more ideas in one sentence.
试着找出在一句话中将两个或更多的观点结合在一起的地方。
Take note of different ways to combine similar or different ideas, and try to use them in your writing.
注意使用不同的方法来结合相似或不同的观点，并尝试在写作中应用起来。
Let's move on and look at one more key skill.
我们再看看另一个关键技能。
Look at these three sentences.
请观察这三个句子。
‘The number of 35-44-year-olds living with their parents was quite high – around 50.'
“35-44岁和父母住在一起的人数相当多，大约为50。”
‘The percentage of 35-44-year-olds living with flatmates decreased dramatically compared to the younger age group.'
“与更年轻的年龄组相比，35-44岁的人与室友同住的比例明显下降了。”
‘Just over a quarter of 35-44-year-olds lived by themselves.'
“在35-44岁的人中，超过四分之一的人独居。”
What do you think? Good sentences, or not? All three sentences have problems.
你觉得怎么样？这样的表达可行吗？这三个句子都有问题。
Can you find them? You'll need to look at the charts, too.
你能找出问题吗？你还需要看一下图表。
Pause the video and think about it if you want.
暂停视频，可以的话试着思考一下。
Any ideas? Let's look together.
有什么见解吗？我们一起分析一下。
All three sentences have issues with precision of language.
这三句话都存在语言精确性方面的问题。
We see these problems often in our students' IELTS writing.
我们在学生的雅思写作中经常看到这些问题。
The first sentence refers to ‘number' and ‘around 50'.
第一个句子指的是“数字”和“大约占50”。
This is too loose.
这个表达太不严谨了。
First, the pie charts don't give you *numbers*, in the sense of quantities.
首先，饼状图没有给出数量方面的“数字”。
It's a percentage, so you should use the word ‘percentage' or ‘proportion'.
它是一个百分比，所以你应该用“百分比”或者“比例”。
Secondly, what does ‘50' mean? 50 what? If you mention a number, you should add the units, in this case, ‘percent'.
第二，“50”是什么意思？50个什么？如果你提到一个数字，你应该加上单位，这里指的是“百分比”。
The second sentence has two problems.
第二句有两处问题。
First, it doesn't make sense to say that the percentage ‘decreased'.
首先，说百分比“下降”是毫无意义的。
‘Decrease', ‘increase' and similar verbs are used when things change over time, but these pie charts refer to one moment.
当事情随着时间的变化而变化时，才会用到“Decrease”、“increase”等类似的动词，但这些饼状图指的是某一时刻。
Secondly, ‘dramatically' suggests a very large difference or change,
其次，“dramatic”表示非常大的差异或变化，
but in this case, the difference between the two percentages was not that great.
但在这个例句中，这两个百分比的差异并不是很大。
IELTS students often try to use words like this to increase their vocabulary score.
雅思学生经常尝试使用这样的词汇来提高他们的词汇分数。
However, it's more important that your words fit the data accurately.
然而，更重要的是，文字要准确地符合数据。
Here's a better version of sentence two: What about the third sentence? Very simple: the information is incorrect.
前两句需要表达地更准确一些：第三句怎么样？很简单：信息是不正确的。
The pie chart shows that just under a quarter of this age group lived alone.
饼状图显示，这个年龄段只有不到四分之一的人独居。
When you're under time pressure, it's easy to make mistakes like this.
当你赶时间作答的时候，很容易犯这样的错误。
However, mistakes with the data will limit your TA score to six, so it's important to make sure you get every detail accurate.
然而，数据方面的错误会导致小作文的任务完成分数限制在6分，所以确保每个细节都准确是很重要的。
Don't forget to practise this further by visiting the full version of this lesson on our website.
不要忘记通过访问我们网站上这节课的完整版本来进一步练习。
You could also try writing your own answer for this task.
你也可以尝试写下你自己的答案。
Good luck if you have an IELTS exam coming up soon! Thanks for watching! See you next time!
如果你马上就要参加雅思考试，那么祝你好运！感谢收看！我们下次见！
